Can someone judge my essay?, see if it is persuassive, please rate from 1-10, serious answerers only?

Posted by admin on February 21st, 2010 and filed under total oil production | 11 Comments »

Gas prices are going up. Why shouldn’t they? The world is consuming more and more gasoline. Oil that is left in this world is becoming more rare. Each year, 1.2 trillion gallons of oil are turned into 26.3 trillion (2.628 X 1013 ) pounds of carbon dioxide. That is the weight of 13 billion adult elephants! Who would do anything like that? Researcher? Crazy Scientists? Terrorists? No, it’s you! Burning gasoline cause big air pollution. When you casually turned on your car engine and drive, you are burning gasoline. That is not the only problem gasoline produces. With humongous amount of gasoline are consumed at a sky-high rate everyday, the amounts of oil that are left are scarce. Gasoline that took millions of years to form are being burned up in a year.
Gasoline, oil, and coal are 75% of the world’s energy. Gasoline is a very “impure” liquid when drilled. It must be taken to refineries to make it usable. Gasoline often leaked out of the pipes. In March 2006, the worst oil spill occurred in USA, 260,000 gallons of gasoline spilled in an Alaska refinery, causing the nearby trees, plants, animals, and all living habitants to die or severely wounded. It also forced five gasoline processing center to close down. Burning gasoline cause huge air pollution. Six pounds of gasoline can create 20 pounds of carbon dioxide when burned. It may not sound possible, but when gasoline are burned, each carbon atom in the gasoline, which weights 12 Atomic Mass Unit, combines with two oxygen atom, which weights 16 Atomic Mass Unit to create carbon dioxide. That gives total of 44 Atomic Mass Unit, which is almost 4 times the weight of the original carbon dioxide. Gasoline contains 90% of carbon, so the weight of carbon dioxide produced is way higher than the original gasoline. Each year, 13 billion adult elephants’ weights of carbon dioxide are created with gasoline.
“America is addicted to oil,” said George Bush. It’s true. United States produces only 4% of the world’s gasoline each year, but uses 1/3 of the world’s gasoline every year! That’s a lot of oil. Americans like spending big, but spending big must pay prices. With almost 300 million Americans driving an average of more than 60 minutes per day, the amount of gasoline burned is tremendous. Gas prices are average of $3/gallon. Many people think it’s a lot, but wait until you hear this. In Europe, gas prices are average of $7/gallon. That is more than twice the Americans pay! To fill an SUV in America cost around $22, but in Europe, it will be over $100! Why would Europeans want to drive when they have cheap, clean, and convenient transportations like metros? Low gas prices in America encourage consumers to use more gasoline, and then more people would buy cars. The use of public transportation decreases. I think the government should rise up the gas price and improve public transportation. It may not sound good now, but it will help us in the long run.
Gasoline not just pollute the air and harm the economy, but it can also harm us politically. United States imports most of its oil. Sixty percent of the imported gasoline are from unstable places such as the Organization of the Petroleum Exporting Countries (OPEC). The OPEC countries are mainly located in Mid-East, South Asia, Africa, and South America. These nations control worlds’ sixty-seven percent of gasoline production. These countries basically controls the worlds’ gasoline prices. They can stop importing gasoline to the country that does not meet their demand. 1973 to 1973, Israel and Arab were at war. US supplied Israel with arms and supplies. In response, oil producing Arab countries cut off oil shipment to USA. They also slow down the oil production, which caused oil shortage and increasing prices all over the world. This showed that Arab countries are willing to use gasoline as a weapon.
As growing technology, gasoline demands are increasing higher and higher. Air pollution made from burning gasoline can cause the Earth to desert. If Mars is habitable, maybe we can go there and start polluting the air on Mars. Then we will destroy that plant. At least it will give us a few centuries.

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11 Responses

  1. badfish911 Says:

    your not serious are you?
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  2. waterwidget Says:

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  3. fabee Says:

    I think it’s pretty interesting because you mixed successfully your opinion to the additional information.
    Two things though: – too much of the "13 billion elephants" comparison.
    – You should give your sources (where did you get those figures and information from?)
    Apart from that, good job!
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  4. Anthony Gonsalves Says:

    Great essay. But be careful. U r hurting our religious sentiments u moron (Religion of automobiles driving). Rating for the essay I would give you a 9 out of 10. Rating for ur popularity after the essay would be 1 out of 10. The 1 is from enviornmentalists like GreenPeace & sort.
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  5. angie Says:

    naw yo essay waz long but it waz ba ass hell though ill give it a 8!!!1well dats ma opinion
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  6. glitterprincess Says:

    I would give it about a 7 1/2 to an 8. You do have a few typos and a few of your sentences could stand to be more clear. Also I would take out the, "I think the govt…..) and replace it with something like, "That is why the govt…), unless your teacher told you it was OK to use the personal. But it is fairly persuasive and if you fix up a few grammar problems you should get a good grade.
    Oh yeah, be sure and cite your sources!
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  7. daniel_wickins Says:

    its cool
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  8. willy Says:

    my rate is 6 make your messages connected to each other for the reader undestand what message you are trying to convey rewrite them again make it simple but clear and concise
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  9. plantboy03047 Says:

    10
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  10. CJ1977 Says:

    I think that essays is a 9! It was well written, very informative and straight to the point but is missing your sources!!!
    Make sure you are able to back up all the facts by including your references at the end of the essay…

    Excellent essay, I loved it and agree with it 100%
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  11. the_comeback Says:

    I’d give it a 5 may be 6. You need to discuss how trees help absorb co2. By absorbing into their leaves and when the leaves fall to the ground and re-releases their prdocut. Also, we produce around 95% of our own natural gas. China is also growing and concuming more oil. The chinese government was planning to take over an american oil company which caused quite a bit of controvesy. You need to discuss the 500 million dollars in subsidies the american government gave to the oil companies to "look for new sources." oh yea and the two typos and the whole thing about mars kinda just came out of left field id\ would lose that or make it sound better. And one lat thing, the essay was kinda depressing. You need to add a looking into the future statement. something thts discuss the new fusion test plant that will come online in 2008. Or the hope of hydrogen. Also, don’t place the sole pblame of gas prices upon the people on who you are reading the report. Well, you can but also throw in the governmental lobbist. becasue those corrupt bastards are mostly to blame and oh oh the new ethanol campaigne go yellow yea go to hell. Which is actually the corn lobbiest in congress because it is much easier to produce it from sugar cane which brazil has been doing for years. But this has been in the news a couple of times in the recent years but always in the opinion section or page 8. But now they do something about it, when this could have been avoided back in the 1970s or the 50s for that matter when they predicted the 70s crisis. No, they waited on there to be a problem. ignorant Americans they think they know, they read a report on cnn and thats it they are instantly experts, while not knowing a single real thing jsut the controversial topics but not the history. They scream and yell and they march and they get they’re fifteen minutes but do they change politics. Does this open there mind and tell them to see past the ruse. The false superficial facade that they’re politicians bear. No, they are eager each poll vote, each november election to vote in the next unguided, untruthful, most not real person into office. All beacuse he spent millions and millions of dollars on his campaigne. So I guess we are to blame. To blame for all this and we’ll just do it again and again. Oil today, _________ tommorow.

    add that to your report youll get an A copy and paste, if you haven’t turned it in
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    my head, the news, and oh yea research over the years

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